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I think, if not having previous and next buttons, it might be good to at least have "Comment" buttons, so the reader doesn't have to scroll through 5 screens in order to comment.

I hope the lads don't talk about "breeding" to the lasses as directly as they do to each other. Glad to see that they value intelligence as much as breeding ability, though.

Still mostly a comedy of manners. I hope that they can get through this dance and actually start *doing* something. 😉

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So have a comment button at the top?

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Well, after the post and before the Table of Contents. After the "Thank you for reading this" might work.

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I think that I've figured out part of article 17. It has to do with marriage. From what I've gathered, the young men can "article 17" a young lass, and she has no choice but to date him, if not marry him. It sounds like something between a betrothal and a wedding.

I also found the auction system interesting. Imagine having to pay to be inducted into the military. It's different from the draft, which would accept any and all takers.

I can't quite place the genre, though. It has overtones of Science Fiction, but there are also enough historical allusions. It reads like a better, well-thought-out version of Star Wars. One where the Empire actually makes sense, and there's a purpose for the military other than to frighten the citizenry.

Over all, the characters are more human, and while the governor's daughter sounds intelligent, she's coming off as a real woman that's not sure about love.

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I think you have the auction system backwards. Rich parents can pay poor kids so that the rich parents kids aren’t inducted into the army.

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I guess I did get that wrong. Either way, it sounds like a benefit. The rich kid doesn't have to serve, and the poor kid can serve and distinguish himself. Thank you for correcting my misunderstanding.

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